Romanko Zemi

 

Conclusion Examples

 

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Here are three examples of conclusions from previous student's writing.

 

 

 

 

BY: Tomoko Yamaguchi

Title of the paper: Advantages to Unit Care

 

Thesis statement: This paper will argue that unit care should be recognized as a good option for elderly care because it emphasizes the idea of living in a home, the residents can have their private time as well as time to meet others, it places importance on the residents' previous daily habits, and their quality of life.

 

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This paper has looked at four characteristics of unit care: the idea of living in a home, the residentsf private time and time to meet others, their previous daily habits, and their quality of life. The previous special nursing homes in Japan were built like hospitals and gave priority to the staff. However, the new special nursing homes focus on the residentsf quality of life. There are not only private rooms for residents to have time to themselves but also spaces to meet others. They can lead their lives in a homelike atmosphere. They have the staff help them with what they canft do, and they do what they can do by themselves. This way, the elderly people in the new homes can preserve their self-respect and lead better lives than people in the previous homes.

In the future, your relatives and neighbors might live in a special nursing home. In some distant future, you might live in one. So, you should think of this as your problem, too. We have to remember that this can happen to us, too. Even with dementia and serious handicaps, and without the ability to speak or understand speech, elderly people are still human beings and our seniors for life. When someone moves to a home and becomes a person who needs nursing care, please remember that. Hopefully, Japan will become a better country and the elderly people will not just wait to die, but will enjoy the last part of their lives.

 

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Why is Tomoko's conclusion good?

Tomoko chose to make her conclusion two paragraphs.

In the first paragraph, she repeats her thesis statement and summarizes the main points from her body paragraphs.

In the second paragraph, she discusses (makes a prediction about) the future of her topic and what we (all people) need to remember about aging and elderly people.

 

BY: Azusa Tomio

Title of the paper: Comparative Culture Through Two Fairytales

 

Thesis statement: This paper will look at two fairytales, Sleeping Beauty and the God of Water. These two fairytales have similar plots but many differences. This paper will compare differences in the religions of Japan and Europe as they are represented in the fairytales and it will suggest reason for these differences.

 

Conclusion@

 

This paper looked at two differences between Sleeping Beauty and the God of Water: religions and what the main characters in each story do when they get in trouble. It shows these differences are influenced by two contrastive countryfs cultural characteristics, the European idea of confront trouble and the Japanese idea of accept trouble. It also suggests historical and geographical explanations for the differences.

         There are many people whose ideas are different from us, because history and geography vary according to the country. To know differences of culture and to consider the reason for the differences helps our inter-cultural communication. Also, we can know ourselves by comparing ourselves with other cultures. Japanese who accept trouble are more quiet and obedient than Europeans who confront trouble, and Japanese need to gain confidence. In the future, the chances to meet foreigners will go on increasing. So it is important for Japanese to deepen their knowledge of culture and to know their own strengths and weakness.

 

 

Why is Azusa's Conclusion good?

Azusa chose to make her conclusion two paragraphs.

In the first paragraph, Azusa repeats her thesis statement and summarizes the main points from her body paragraphs.

In the second paragraph, she first gives her opinion about culture and people. She then finishes her paper with a suggestion about what Japanese people need to do to help deepen their knowledge of culture and themselves.

 

BY: Chinami Kawakami

Title of the paper: Why is Portland Weird?

 

Thesis statement: This paper will analyze the slogan, gkeep Portland weirdh. It will first discuss the meaning of the slogan. Then, it will talk about the history of the slogan. Next it will explain about different kinds of weirdness in Portland. Finally it will suggest why people in Portland want to keep their weirdness.

 

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This paper analyzed four elements of the slogan, gkeep Portland weirdh: the meaning of the slogan, the history of the slogan, three different kinds of weirdness in Portland, and reasons for keeping Portland weird.

The slogan, gKeep Portland weirdh means keep it unique. It is a positive slogan, and it shows people in Portland have their own unique ways. Actually this slogan was based on gKeep Austin weirdh, but it has been known as an unofficial motto of Portland all over Portland and throughout the United States. Keep Portland weird bumper stickers and sign in Portland became famous, and weird Portland food, events and people are also interesting for people visiting from other cities or countries. Finally, the reasons why Portlanders want to keep their weirdness are to support local business, support community, and develop the economy in Portland.

         In conclusion, it is good for Portland to keep the city weird because it is related to business, economy, and community. Portlanders enjoy making or keeping their weirdness. Even though Portlanders who are making the city weird might seem crazy, they take pride and contribute to the city. In the future, people in Portland will continue to keep it weird, and they will also find or make new weirdness because they know it is good for the city to have weird Portland food, events, and people.

 

 

Why is Chinami's conclusion good?

Chinami chose to make her conclusion three paragraphs.

In the first paragraph, Chinami repeats her thesis statement in a different way from how she used it in her introduction.

In the second paragraph she summarizes the main points from her body paragraphs.

In the third paragraph she first gives her opinion about the positive effect weirdness has on Portland. She then finishes her paper with a prediction of what Portland will do in the future.

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